Eve's Story - Remastered

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That's right, it's all done! Well, I'm just waiting for :iconddraigtanto: to go over the last few edits and sign it off, but once he's done that, it'll be online for all to read; an expanded and revamped version of "Eve's Story"!

I should explain what brought this about; shortly before Christmas, me and :iconddraigtanto: (and :iconkeizerharm:) were discussing random ideas for the series, and I slowly ended up wanting to try and write something set in the past, as a way of exploring some of the new elements that we'd been adding to the series. It wasn't until I had a fresh look at :iconvenus-dragoness:' reference picture of Ddraig ( :Commish: - Ddraigtanto Reference (1/6) by Venus-Dragoness) that I became inspired; taking a second look, I noticed that she had added blue membranes along Ddraig's back, which her mother had, but which she didn't have herself. Since this presented an exciting opportunity for a scene with Ddraig noting how she looked a lot more like her mother, I began discussing ways with :iconddraigtanto: to make a scene out of it, and eventually, I wrote a short section that got added to the end of this chapter; TLoS: UAA 17: Guardians for Refuge, Part 3Ddraigtanto was in a bad state, but at least he/she was still considerate to call home and let Eve and Cynder know where he/she was. Following this, he/she barely slept that night. The storm, with its random bursts of thunder, lightning and heavy precipitation, rattled violently against the windows of the Temple; occasionally, he/she would notice the lights outside in the hallway, and shadows pass his/her door as one of the guardians handled young students who were frightened by the angriness of the weather. It also didn't help that he/she didn't know what to feel; he/she had grown up in the Dragon Temple, but this wasn't the temple he/she grew up in, not to mention he/she hadn't lived in the temple for years, it just didn't feel right to him/her...
It thus came as no surprise that, when the morning came and the storm passed, and rain poured from the guttering, pattering on the ground below, Ddraig lacked either the energy, nor the drive, to get out of bed...

The sun was now sta


After I did that, I began thinking about another scene I'd talked about with :iconddraigtanto:; rewriting Schakri's death scene in Lost Memories, as the original one was unnecessarily violent; with Ddraig coming across less like a dragon slaying a foul creature, and more like Gregor Clegane beating the snot out of...well, you know what I'm talking about. Anyway, I'd noted a while back that it would work better if his death was accidental, since it would explain how Ddraig escaped major prosecution - and also allow for some interesting scenes in the future, where Ddraig could agonise over being responsible for her father's death, and Schakri's spirit could even use this to torment her if he manages to manifest himself. Since this was such a huge plot point in the series, and one that would likely be referenced again soon, I figured it was crucial to fix this one sooner rather than later - Dragons Unite and Love & Life are already scheduled to be rewritten at some point into two new stories; one which will focus on Ddraig's early rule, and the other which will be Love & Life V2; same basic story, but with some strange characterisations(Nightshade being VERY evil and nothing like the character which appears in all the other stories) and plot holes (Ddraig mentioning his father having passed away, and him MISSING HIM) removed - and so I ended up writing an extended fight scene which also got worked into the old chapter;

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While writing that scene, I tried to get a better idea of what made Schakri tick, and why he acted the way he did, and I ended up picturing a very sad dragon indeed; one who'd watched his whole life fall apart around him; who felt that his own family had betrayed him by abandoning him, and who now has to live in a damp cave and work repulsive jobs for humans in order to bring enough food back for his mate and child; both of whom he torments to make him feel better about himself, and also to make them feel like they can't leave, so he won't be on his own. I should note I'm not trying to paint him as a sympathetic character, because he's not; he's a nasty old dragon who's blaming everyone else for how his life went wrong, and never accepting his role in things...but this is how he views it, and to have that in mind helps you shape the way he acts.
Anyway, after doing that, I began musing about my idea to explore Ddraig's past again, since I thought it could be interesting to try and add some more details to Schakri that would come across in Ddraig's memories...and after failing to come up with a plot for a short involving Selena and Ddraig that I was happy with - it was going to be linked to Selena not being much of a fan of meat, and involve a Relgimist Nature Dragon philosophy about only eating meat when it's needed for sustenance, and there's nothing else available, but I was worried it would sound like an attack on vegetarianism or something - I came up with the mad idea to rewrite Eve's Story...which would allow me to add these new scenes, and also ones linked to new elements me and :iconddraigtanto: had since added to the series - for instance, Warfang Manor once being the home of Ddraig's mentor, Galen Rifer - and it would also us to bring Eve's Story up to the same writing standard as the newer stories, and thus make it less of a chore for :iconddraigtanto: when he returns to the older stories.

Well, that took a bit longer to write than I meant, but still! Have a read of the story, and be sure to tell us what you think! It's the same old story, and large parts of the original text are still there, but they've been restructured somewhat, and a whole lot of extra elements and notes tying the story to the later ones better have been added in!
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Hmm, so it is the twelve chapters in that linked folder you will be releasing?